In a previous article, "Danny Deger" said:
"Morgans" wrote in message
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Be carefull, that your writing is not so "lingo correct" that the only
ones that can read it are people that are in the field. That would limit
your audience, quite a bit. g

Thanks for the feedback, I agree. It turns out this opening sequence is
full of lingo, but I find the next several pages slacking off a lot. I
think this might be OK in the long run. Time will tell.

My goal was and is a strong opening followed by a story told at a more
modest pace.

I agree with both of you - you can have too much lingo and confuse people,
but you need enough to give us a "you are there" sensation. It has to
feel real, and you do that by talking across to us rather than down, but
not using terminology we don't know.

Ed Raismus who posts mostly in rec.aviation.military wrote a couple of
books about his Viet Nam experiences - I read the first one, and I'm going
to be ordering the second one because he does a really good job of
striking the right balance.

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