A Little Proof Reading for Historians, please...

Jay Honeck wrote:

Please see: http://alexisparkinn.com/the_iowa_city_airport.htm

Ok, grammar corrections.

1. Delete the sentence "Who was Jack Knight? Read on.."
2. In the Jack Knight section, don't highlight "Iowa City, Iowa".
3. Perhaps it's my browser, but the line "The plane was piloted by Ira A.
Biffle of Lincoln, Nebraska, who was Charles Lindbergh's first flight
instructor." is in a different font than the rest of the text.
4. I would remove the note about the 2003 tour. At the least, make it the
same color text as the rest of the piece, but it really doesn't belong in
this section. It might perhaps make a good footnote. And the PT-17s, which
are usually what someone means by a Stearman, were not airmail planes -
they date from nearly a decade later. The Super Stearman was definitely
not used for mail runs.
5. In your list of postwar "breakthrough aircraft", you have "1949 - First
Non-Stop Flight Around the World". This is not an aircraft. Either remove
this or change the list title.
6. The sentence "But the seeds of trouble were quietly being sewn" should
read "But the seeds of trouble were quietly being sown."
7. In the paragraph that reads "Soon, however, their lack of capital and
aviation business background conspired against them, and the city decided
it wanted an FBO that would attract and support more charter business.
Soon the city opened bidding up to find a new FBO, and Jet AIr, Inc, from
Galesburg, IL, won the business over Iowa City Aero.", remove the word "Soon"
from the second sentence. I would also reword the first sentence a bit,
since inanimate objects don't "conspire". Perhaps something like "their lack
of capital and aviation business background began to hamper them".
8. In the next paragraph, "sewing" should be "sowing". I would also make this
just a part of the previous paragraph.
9. I would also concatenate the two paragraphs immediately above "Conclusion".

In general, however, it's nice work. As far as the United hangar is concerned,
you might contact Boeing to see if any of their records still exist. Another
place you might look is Cheyenne. They have a hangar with similar history, and
they've managed to get historical status for it. Maybe they can give you tips.
See http://wyoshpo.state.wy.us/boeing.htm

George Patterson
You can dress a hog in a tuxedo, but he still wants to roll in the mud.